Can anyone please help me with proofreading this english essay about technology. I've read it like a bunch of times, at it sound good to me. But I prefer to get feedback from others. Can anyone tell me what you think about it, and give me feedback. Thanks!
Technology in Today鈥檚 Society
It is easy to say that technology has come a long way, and it seems like everyone is using some type of technology in today鈥檚 world. Whenever I get on a bus or train, I see that almost everyone is using some type of technology; usually a cell phone or an IPod. People cannot live without their cells phones or there IPods, or their computers. I like to use technology in my life. I like using computers, and I use a cell phone.
In today's world, technology is constantly changing from a new paperclip to an improvement in hospital machinery. Technology lets people improve the way they live so that they can preserve their own personal energy and focus on the really important factors in life. Some people focus their energy on making new innovations to improve transportation and the health of people that may save lives and some people focus on making new designs of packaging CDS. Technology is significant in everyone's life because it rapidly changes what is in the market. But, some new innovations of technology are ridiculous because they serve no purpose in helping mankind.
There are some good things about using technology in your everyday life. For example, It is great to have a cell phone next to you just in case you get into a car accident or get attacked by a person you can call the police. Or if you need to talk to someone on how to get to a certain place or get information on something. My stepdad always said that having a phone is great to call 911 in case of emergency.
There are some negative things about using technology in some places. It is not always a good thing to use your IPod on a bus stop or when you鈥檙e walking the streets at night. It will get you distracted, and someone may come from behind and attack you and take it. It is not a great idea to use a computer on the train. That is giving the other people on the train the idea to come and steal it. It is not worth it.
Technology has come a long way with brand new designs that have been made in the past 100 years, (like video games, cell phones, computers, I Pads, touch screen phones and computers, IPod, I Phones, and etc). Who knows what else is going to be created next in the world of technology, but it is sure to be another huge success.
Technology Essay help! Proofreading?
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